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One of the weakest in these harsh surrounds is pushing for a glimpse of freedom.
With violence in ever alley way and blood stains on all their clothing
She finds it hard to break away from the standards of the greater population.
She finds it harder still to fit in with them.

In this fast moving city nothing speaks louder than money, after all money is power and doesn’t everyone want to be powerful?
It seems that each person does bar her; everyone is starving, dying for supremacy.
She just wants a quiet place where a pedigree and a law degree aren’t compulsory.
She is going to find that place before it gets cemented over, like everything else that had once bloomed in her short, plain life.

Striding swiftly down the empty footpath, dodging glances from curious motorists.
She is on her way, out of town, to leave this concrete jungle just the way she found it.
To leave it as ugly and harsh as it had been when she arrived,
And she knows that once she leaves development will only make it more so.

There is no comfort to be had here, not a tree to shelter under, not a park in which to rest.
In the rush hour the people lose their pagers and their tempers as the crowd bustles past.
Everyone has somewhere to go and some job to be doing,
Anyone one who doesn’t is considered less than human.

So nobody worries about the jobless girl, who roams unaccompanied along the highway,
They don’t harness the compassion to worry for her wellbeing, that sense was dulled by the industry.
What the industry doesn’t like the industry abolishes, and there is no room for sentiment.
Business, as they say, is business. Nothing petty like emotion should get in its way.
©2005-2009 ~Silent-Martyr
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Author's Comments

Yeah, it ain't too grand. I didnt spend to long on it and the ending isn't quite up to scratch. But hey, who is complaining?

It about a girl, as usual (I find it hard writing about guys, mostly cause I am a girl), and she is 1 person in a busy city and she just wants to get out.
I spose its a bit of my bitterness towards industrial progress too.

I don't really like the title, I named it in a hurry.

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:iconjayrus:
This has some good points... and is a good story, i can relate to this girl... I hate the city, i actually naver go there i feel more at hom int he bush with mates, people now days seem to forget the simple pleasures of destroying things without consequence...
So i agree, Nobody cares about the other person unless it effects them... WHERE IS THE COMPASSION...

Oh and btw I really liked this piece

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My car is broken, and i want to get to the city... WHY AM I NOT IN THE CITY?
:iconsilent-martyr:
Thanx alot for tha comment, I think most of us can relate to this girl.
The bush is so much better than the city, its just so much more relaxed and unsploit.
Humans seem to have a natural talent for screwing things up for themselves. I hope we come to our senses.
Silent Martyr

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:iconjayrus:
U know we wont ever come to our sences... Like u said, we are driven by money, we make money... its a never ending cycle... well it ends when we finally screw everything up and kill ourselves...

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My car is broken, and i want to get to the city... WHY AM I NOT IN THE CITY?
:iconblackxmonkey:
You claim the bush is so much better htan the city.......have you actually lived out in the middle of no where, surrounded by bush....all your life......i have......mountains and trees get boring to look at after a while
:iconinterzone-mantra:
i have Sam... and i used to take it for granted, until mum moved to lenah valley, now when i go to dad's farm, to me it's a safe haven, so relaxing just to get away from suburbia.. i can see what Julia is trying to say, and it's quite truthful, i think

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A City By The Light Divided
:iconblackxmonkey:
Well i live only in the bush, dont have the option to go stay at another parents hsoue in suburbia as mine are still together
:icondirtyigloo:
I like this one a lot. Mainly because it makes sense to me.. hmmm?. Boy this is faster than texting eh?

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filthy eskimo
:iconsilent-martyr:
Sorry if I offened you with that comment or whatever Sam, but I was only stating my opinion. I do not live surrounded by bush but I do live on the edge of a nature reserve (i.e the bush, or so we call it).
I would have preffered if you had made a comment about the poem itself.

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~The hole for the shallow will always be the deepest~
:iconsilent-martyr:
I aim to make sense at times, other times I dont mind if other people get what I am trying to say or not.
Yeah, this sure it faster than texting. And its not all in capitals, lol.

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~The hole for the shallow will always be the deepest~

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